I disagree with the concept but the execution is solid work. From what I can see it just needs a little more work to make it truely outstanding, like the removal of the crux, and from what I can see a different weapon choice (It's a personal thing, I love the GK storm bolters, I can't see why you removed it when you could have weapon swapped the halberd for a scythe...)
I totally agree with Vain and MarkoftheElite, this is a site for painting, not fluff and background, first of all, as Vain sais, you need imagination. imo imagination is the most important part in miniature painting, if you just follow the "rules" you will have a lame-ass time painting.
and I think that you TWO more experienced painters shouldn't bring down on someone giving him a 2! it's not very nice. if you should have givien him a better score and critique than you did this time, he would have much more imagination and fantasy to come up with other brilliant ideas that you might never have thought about... so a tip.. think about what you are saying when posting comments!
// Larre