I'm a complete beginner, this is my 11th miniature (and first metal one). I'm still learning and I thought it would be cool to know if it shows promise or I'm completely hopeless. Comments and tips would be really appreciated.
There's definite promise here - don't give up!
My first piece of advice would be to thin your paint more than you are at the moment. You'll be amazed what a difference this makes to your control and will enable you to achieve smoother results.