Drawing

[junior elf]

This was a drawing that I did yesterday just for fun. Its inspired by a space marine although I have changed it a lot. Its supposed to be holding a pint of beer but I\'m not very happy with the way the glass turned out. There are also other week points, such as the hands and the tubes connecting the legs to the pelvis but nevertheless I am very happy with the way it turned out. C&C appreciated, please bear in mind that I\'m only 12 though .

 

[PegaZus]

I think you\'ve self-criticized all of the things I\'d bash you on. But maybe I can add some insight (untalented as it may be).

I think the mug doesn\'t work well because of the perspective. The top of it seems to be too open. If you drew a line parallel to the bottom from the extremes of the top, it would probably appear better. The top of the opening is probably too open as well. (Did that make any sense? I\'m having trouble putting it into words.) And the entire mug may be on the wrong angle entirely, but I\'m not sure of that.

And you\'re right about the hip and knee joints. I want to hit copy/paste badly to hide those. Had the legs around the \"knee\" been out to the edges of the above and below parts, I\'d imagine that it wouldn\'t stand out as much.

All said, better than I can do @ 3X yer age. So, have some rootbeer: :beer:

 

[DaN]

Looks more Eldary
Nice shading though

 

[mud duck]

The thing to remember when drawing cylinders is that it is two circles connected by two lines. Or as my drawing teacher would say, \'Circles don\'t have any corners.\'

The trick is to get the circles to look the same.
Keep practicing

 

[BarstoolProphet]

Originally posted by mud duck
Or as my drawing teacher would say, \'Circles don\'t have any corners.\'

This is debatable. You could just as accurately say that circles have an infinite number of corners.

 

[lizcam]

First let me say that for your age it is VERY good. A couple of things you might want to look at. Lok at the legs. The thigh area is the same thength and the pelvis makes it look like they should be facing you but the lower legs are different sizes and one foot is higher then the other making it look like it should be facing slightly to the left. The \"back\" leg should all be a bit shorter to make that illusion come off right.

Again, tho\', that\'s a hard one to learn how to do and for your age you\'re doing excellent!

 

[freakinacage]

brill for your age mate. keep doodling. over time you could improve greatly. as mentioned, you have pointed out all the faults so keep going!!

as for the top of the beer, i think it looks weird because the foam is coming over the top? maybe have it dripping down the lowest edge

 

[Undave]

How\'s he going to drink the beer if he has no mouth?

 

[freakinacage]

Originally posted by Undave
How\'s he going to drink the beer if he has no mouth?

he\'s bringing it to me!

 

[junior elf]

Thanks for all the crits and compliments
@lizcam: I became aware of the fact that the joints between the legs and the thighs look like they\'re pointing out as soon as I drew them but I thought that they wouldn\'t show once I\'d done the rest but they do
@mud duck & Barstool: My personal point of view is that a circle has no corners, as for it to have corners you would need more than one line, but a circle only has one line.
@Undave: Well, I thought about that, and the only thing I came up with was that he pours it down his neck (you can\'t see the neck in the drawing).

PS: does anyone know the equivalent of CMON for drawings as I don\'t want keep sending my pics here for constructive criticism.

Thanks in advance to everyone.

 

[junior elf]

@freakinacage: we must have posted at the same time. I like the Idea of him being a waiter lots lol lol lol lol

 

[BarstoolProphet]

@junior: Deviantart is probably the place to go. But y\'know, we probably don\'t mind giving you constructive criticism about drawing. Some of the people here are darned good artists.
For myself, I doodle some, but only occasionally manage to produce anything worth showing anyone else.

 

[junior elf]

Thanks Barstool but Devianart seems a bit too grown up (not that CMON isn\'t, of course ) and I guess that if people don\'t mind I\'ll keep posting here.

 

[Gilvan Blight]

If DeviantArt is too old, how about Elfwood

www.elfwood.com

Not bad. I suggest googling proportions and getting things down like 7 and a half heads tall. You\'ve got a great concept of depth and shading (probably from mini painting) but the proportions and some of the angles are just off a bit. Maybe google perspective after proportions.

 

[hestan101]

looks brillint, very well done shading. being the same age as yourself, i am in the fortunate postion of having no talent or skill wahtsoever, but my teachers think i do still, great peice

 

[Shawn R. L.]

I\'m 47 and have been at this art thing for about 30 years and I must say that for being 12 you are doing VERY well. At this stage, it\'s important to stick with what interest\'s you and is fun. Don\'t try to learn it all at one time.

One thing I\'d say you could look into a bit is what\'s called foreshortening. I looked a bit on Google and couldn\'t find any good simple examples. Try this - Get a mirror, with the hand you don\'t draw with reach towards the mirror and draw what you SEE. Much of your arm will not be visible and your hand will be larger than you THINK it should be. This is a good exercise. Simply drawing what you ACTUALLY SEE.

This would be fun to help you with in the WIP section.

 

[Necroghast]

Originally posted by Shawn R. L.
I\'m 47 and have been at this art thing for about 30 years and I must say that for being 12 you are doing VERY well. At this stage, it\'s important to stick with what interest\'s you and is fun. Don\'t try to learn it all at one time.

One thing I\'d say you could look into a bit is what\'s called foreshortening. I looked a bit on Google and couldn\'t find any good simple examples. Try this - Get a mirror, with the hand you don\'t draw with reach towards the mirror and draw what you SEE. Much of your arm will not be visible and your hand will be larger than you THINK it should be. This is a good exercise. Simply drawing what you ACTUALLY SEE.

This would be fun to help you with in the WIP section.

Another way to do this is to take a picture, flip it upside down and draw that. Then it doesn\'t look they way it\'s supposed to and you really do draw what you see. (Not sure how this\'ll help you with your drawing but it\'s good practice)

 

[junior elf]

I\'ll try flipping a pic upside down and drawing it, thanks.

 

[Shawn R. L.]

Upside down, in a mirror are good once you have the drawing worked out and are fine tuning. My point with the mirror in this case is to draw yourself reaching towards the mirror so you could see forshortening \'in action\'. One of the difficult things with forshortening is that one can get stuck on KNOWING that (in the case of reaching towards the mirror) your arm is there and yet leaving most of it out because you simply don\'t SEE it.

Often there is a tendancy to draw what we \'know\' as opposed to what we actually SEE. We all \'know\' that asphalt is black but when I do a landscape with a road in it, the road is one of the lightest objects in it. We \'know\' that trees are green yet often here at this time of year when viewed at a distance they are a very dull grey/blue/green. On some of the hills around here they are very much blue at certain times of day.