i like what you were going for, and a few things worked out very nicely (the feathers, and face in particular).
one tip at a time: i find that if you do the freehand line with black first (or white, if its light on black, then paint your color on to that stripe it looks a little more crisp. i guess it reall comes down to contrast - hilight the high points in the cloth on the freehand as well - so the feeling of deapth carries through. good work, keep at it.